Wall Of Bones

[Transistorkiller]

Viel Spaß damit!


Every single word touches my heart
Some make it break, some tear it apart
Black days follow clear nights and my pitch black soul is really prepared to die

Every touch scratches my anger
Silence keeps breeding seeds of danger
Humbling in the dirt gets me blurry eyes
Sadness brings pain while I live that disguise

My obsession keeps yelling at me
Any confession doesn't hold any water
Empty, but full of shit
I slip on all that blood I spit

As fixed as I am, you keep spinning me
I drown myself in words
A farewell here and there
reaching out for people I never met before

Hello beast, it's been a while
Fierced I missed your fangs stickin' in my eyes
My confession doesn't hold any water
How can you try to hold me?

Ashes of a burning beast I snuff in with a tubule made from my bone
I drown myself in dust.

A high five to some of my friends with my left hand
My body is covered in gasoline. A black lighter in my right hand.

I'm the center of circles
Disappointment of one man
Hatred saved for any reason
My feet pulling in different directions

A seven inch nail in my forehead tells me how I have to die
A copper cord fixed with a clamp connected to a socket and ready to overload
Fighting fire with fire, I plan to blow the lights down
Not afraid to succeed



Wäre schön, wenn sich mal jemand dazu äußern würde great: ).
Gruß,
Marco

 

[bass-baer]

Hi,

bei der Lektüre musste ich an die alten Linking Park denken. Ich hoffe die kleinen Änderungen sind für dich hilfreich, sie sollen die Verständlichkeit verbessern und den Textflow fördern.

Wall Of Bones


Every single word of you touches my heart
Some make it break, or tear it apart
Black days follow clear nights
and my pitch black soul is just prepared to die

Every touch of you scratches my anger
your silence keeps breeding seeds of danger
creeping in the dirt gets me blurry eyes
Sadness brings pain while I live in disguise

My obsession keeps yelling at me
Any confession doesn't hold any water ??? unbekannte redewendung
all so empty, but just full of shit
I'm slipping on all that blood I spit

As fixed as I am, you keep spinning me round
and I'm drowning myself in words
A farewell here and there
reaching out for people I never met before

Hello my beast, it's been a while
just fierce I missed your fangs stickin' in my eyes
My confession doesn't hold any water ??? unbekannte Redewendung
How can you dare to hold me?

Ashes of a burned beast I'm sniffing
with a pipe made from my bones
I sink myself in dust.

A high five to some of my friends with my left hand,
my clothes drenched in gasoline,
a black??? gas lighter in my right hand. ?tut schwarz was zur sache

I spin in the centre of my circles,
disappointment of only one man
with hatred saved for any reason,
my feet are pulled in different directions

A seven inch nail in my forehead
tells me how I have to die
A copper cord fixed with a clamp
that's connected to a socket
and just ready to short circuit
Fighting fire with fire,
I plan to blow my lights out
afraid not to succeed.

 

[Transistorkiller]

Danke für Deine Mühe.
Der Sinn geht aber bei Deinen Verbesserungen verloren.
Die Redewendung stellt soviel, wie das Gegenteil von "Hieb- und Stichfest" dar.

 

[desgraca]

Hey Marco, also ich seh eigentlich nur zwei Stellen wo es sprachlich hakt, alles andere oben genannte kannst du daher als optional sehen.
Was allerdings meinem persönlichen Geschmack nach anzumerken wäre ist, dass du sehr detailreich beschreibst, wie lang zum Beispiel dieser Nagel ist, in welcher Hand du das Feuerzeug hältst, etc. etc. ...
Deswegen wirkt es, nur ganz am Schluss, wo sich ja eigentlich die Spannung ins unermessliche steigern müsste, extrem technisch. Wenn du natürlich genau das erreichen willst, würde ich das vielleicht sogar noch ausbauen, noch mehr ad absurdum führen.

Every single word touches my heart
Some make it break, some tear it apart
Black days follow clear nights and my pitch black soul is really prepared to die

Every touch scratches my anger
Silence keeps breeding seeds of danger
Humbling in the dirt gets me blurry eyes leaves me with blurry eyes
Sadness brings pain while I live that disguise

My obsession keeps yelling at me
Any confession doesn't hold any water
Empty, but full of shit
I slip on all that blood I spit

As fixed as I am, you keep spinning me
I drown myself in words
A farewell here and there
reaching out for people I never met before

Hello beast, it's been a while
Fierced I missed your fangs stickin' in my eyes Fierced passt hier nich....ich würds eigentlich einfach rauslassen
My confession doesn't hold any water
How can you try to hold me?

Ashes of a burning beast I snuff in with a tubule made from my bone
I drown myself in dust.

A high five to some of my friends with my left hand
My body is covered in gasoline. A black lighter in my right hand.

I'm the center of circles
Disappointment of one man
Hatred saved for any reason
My feet pulling in different directions

A seven inch nail in my forehead tells me how I have to die
A copper cord fixed with a clamp connected to a socket and ready to overload
Fighting fire with fire, I plan to blow the lights down
Not afraid to succeed

 

[Transistorkiller]

Fighting fire with fire, I plan to blow the lights down
Not afraid to succeed
A seven inch nail in my forehead tells me how I have to die
A copper cord fixed with a clamp connected to a socket and ready to overload

Shadows dancing beneath, devils speaking from a wall
I choke on smoke of my burning hair
Feeling my eyeballs pop

Blöd, ich muss jetzt leider auf die Arbeit....

 

[Transistorkiller]

Hm, wenn ich jetzt so weiter mache verliere ich mich irgendwie völlig.
Deswegen drehe ich einfach den letzten Absatz und finds gut.
Every single word touches my heart
Some make it break, some tear it apart
Black days follow clear nights and my pitch black soul is really prepared to die

Every touch scratches my anger
Silence keeps breeding seeds of danger
Humbling in the dirt gets me blurry eyes
Sadness brings pain while I live that disguise

My obsession keeps yelling at me
Any confession doesn't hold any water
Empty, but full of shit
I slip on all that blood I spit

As fixed as I am, you keep spinning me
I drown myself in words
A farewell here and there
reaching out for people I never met before

Hello beast, it's been a while
Fierced I missed your fangs stickin' in my eyes
My confession doesn't hold any water
How can you try to hold me?

Ashes of a burning beast I snuff in with a tubule made from my bone
I drown myself in dust.

A high five to some of my friends with my left hand
My body is covered in gasoline. A black lighter in my right hand.

I'm the center of circles
Disappointment of one man
Hatred saved for any reason
My feet pulling in different directions

Fighting fire with fire, I plan to blow the lights down
Not afraid to succeed
A seven inch nail in my forehead tells me how I have to die
A copper cord fixed with a clamp connected to a socket and ready to overload