Metalcore text

[Danielbfmv91]

Hey Leute ich habe mal ein text für das genre metalcore geschrieben und wollte euch um hilfe bitten. Könnt ihr es euch mal durchlesen und korrigieren falls fehler vorhanden sind?
Danke
Lg Daniel

Exsistance




Strophe:
Your exsistance is my judgement to Die!
But i cant change the Past so I will accept your opinion.
No one ask me how i feel! My Hearts beats faster till it Bleeds.


Bridge:
I am the one who make you smile, I am the one who makes you cry!
It will never come to pass!


Chorus:
You follow me!
I hope that everyone will forget!
But Memories will never fade!




Strophe 2:
Another Day! Another agony!
But I cant clean my conscience!
Every thought of you stabbed in my chest!


Breakdown:
The Consequence let you alone!
Till we die!
Understand!!!!


Chorus:
You follow me!
I hope that everyone will forget!
But Memories will never fade!




Epic:
My Sky is falling down!
Darkness inside me!
I will let you Down.
Becouse then my Memories are slipping away!


Chorus:
You follow me!
I hope that everyone will forget!
But Memories will never fade!