Falling Generation

[Ruttma]

Habe grade mal meinen Gedanken freien Lauf gelassen und dabei ist folgendes bei rausgekommen. Ein bischen krasser Text meiner Meinung nach, aber dennoch würde ich gerne wissen, was ihr so davon haltet. Das Meißte wird wohl auf künstlerische Freiheit ausgehen.

We’re falling down but no one really cares
The only things we get are disbelieving stares
We’re breaking our hopeless skulls apart
Cause there’s so much pain that pierces our heart
No one ever gives a damn about how we feel
No one has the view to sense that it’s real

Were falling down
Were falling deep
Into oblivion so sweet
Into hells fiery heat

It crushes our human form to be alive
It splits our mind with a poisoned knife
A dark seed grows steady from our deeds
Nothing left to fulfill our honest needs
A generation suddenly torn asunder
No one to blame for this deadly blunder

Were falling down
Were falling deep
No release left to seek
Only failures to bleed

A blurred sight tumbled through this world
A gesture of hate yet out of sight
Shame, pride, love; nothings left to hide
A mind trapped in a drowned corpse
Time leaves slowly, still without a trace
A weak being facing a raging face

Helpless, just so helpless
Mind and will so strong
What exactly went wrong?
While he passes along

 

[desgraca]

hab mal grade das nur bunt gemacht, was man nichmehr als künstlerische freiheit stehnlassen kann (mit anderen worten, da wär schon noch mehr, was man aber so lassen kann ohne dass es schlimm is)


We’re falling down but no one really cares
The only things we get are disbelieving stares
We’re breaking our hopeless skulls apart
Cause there’s so much pain that pierces our heart
No one ever gives a damn about how we feel
No one has the view to sense that it’s real

has the sense to get it that it's real oder sowas,,,,
has the brains to sense that it's real
has the heart to sense that it's real
has the guts to see that it's real...

all of these, aber nich view
Were falling down
Were falling deep
Into oblivion so sweet
Into hells fiery heat

It crushes our human form to be alive
It splits our mind with a poisoned knife
splits our minds apart
A dark seed grows steady from our deeds
is growing
Nothing left to fulfill our honest needs
no one statt nothing
A generation suddenly torn asunder
No one to blame for this deadly blunder

Were falling down
Were falling deep
No release left to seek
Only failures to bleed
-to+that/ which

A blurred sight tumbled through this world
irgendwie sowas wie "with a blurred side we're tumble through this world
A gesture of hate yet out of sight
Shame, pride, love; nothings left to hide
A mind trapped in a drowned corpse
Time leaves slowly, still without a trace
(besser: time runs out)
A weak being facing a raging face

Helpless, just so helpless
Mind and will so strong
What exactly went wrong?
While he passes along




also abgesehen davon, dass man da mit ein paar mehr umstellungen und verbesserungen als angegeben vermutlich was ziemlich geniales basteln könnte,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ich find den text soweit super

 

[Ruttma]

hab mal grade das nur bunt gemacht, was man nichmehr als künstlerische freiheit stehnlassen kann (mit anderen worten, da wär schon noch mehr, was man aber so lassen kann ohne dass es schlimm is) Ja, das dachte ich mir fasst *hrhr*


We’re falling down but no one really cares
The only things we get are disbelieving stares
We’re breaking our hopeless skulls apart
Cause there’s so much pain that pierces our heart
No one ever gives a damn about how we feel
No one has the sense to get it that it's real - Das passt da sehr gut rein, danke.


Were falling down
Were falling deep
Into oblivion so sweet
Into hells fiery heat

It crushes our human form to be alive
It splits our mind apart with a poisoned knife - Ok, das klingt auch um einiges besser.
A dark seed is growing steady from our deeds
Nothing left to fulfill our honest needs
no one statt nothing - Hm..Da müssen wir mal schauen, denn ich meine es schon wie es dort steht, dass "nichts" mehr übrig ist und nicht "niemand"
A generation suddenly torn asunder
No one to blame for this deadly blunder

Were falling down
Were falling deep
No release left to seek
Only failures which bleed

A blurred sight tumbled through this world
irgendwie sowas wie "with a blurred side we're tumble through this world - Dieses Stück soll auf eine Person bezogen sein und nicht auf die Masse, auch wenn das ebenfalls gut hinkommt.
A gesture of hate yet out of sight
Shame, pride, love; nothings left to hide
A mind trapped in a drowned corpse
Time runs out, still without a trace - Geht auch, yop. Danke.
A weak being facing a raging face

Helpless, just so helpless
Mind and will so strong
What exactly went wrong?
While he passes along

also abgesehen davon, dass man da mit ein paar mehr umstellungen und verbesserungen als angegeben vermutlich was ziemlich geniales basteln könnte,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ich find den text soweit super - Hrhr, da kann man mal sehen was aus Spontanen Schreibdrängen entstehen kann.

 

[desgraca]

We’re falling down but no one really cares
The only things we get are disbelieving stares
We’re breaking our hopeless skulls apart
Cause there’s so much pain that pierces our heart
No one ever gives a damn about how we feel
No one has the sense to get it that it's real - Das passt da sehr gut rein, danke.


Were falling down
Were falling deep
Into oblivion so sweet
Into hells fiery heat

It crushes our human form to be alive
It splits our mind apart with a poisoned knife - Ok, das klingt auch um einiges besser.
A dark seed is growing steady from our deeds
Nothing left to fulfill our honest needs
no one statt nothing - Hm..Da müssen wir mal schauen, denn ich meine es schon wie es dort steht, dass "nichts" mehr übrig ist und nicht "niemand"achso, dann ...hm,,,ja lass es sonst so, mir fällt auch grad keine eindeutigere konstruktion ein
A generation suddenly torn asunder
No one to blame for this deadly blunder

Were falling down
Were falling deep
No release left to seek
Only failures which bleed

A blurred sight tumbled through this world
irgendwie sowas wie "with a blurred side we tumble through this world - Dieses Stück soll auf eine Person bezogen sein und nicht auf die Masse, auch wenn das ebenfalls gut hinkommt.hmmm,,,,,was hältste von
sight blurred, tumbling through this world
A gesture of hate yet out of sight
Shame, pride, love; nothings left to hide
A mind trapped in a drowned corpse
Time runs out, still without a trace - Geht auch, yop. Danke.
A weak being facing a raging face

Helpless, just so helpless
Mind and will so strong
What exactly went wrong?
While he passes along

also abgesehen davon, dass man da mit ein paar mehr umstellungen und verbesserungen als angegeben vermutlich was ziemlich geniales basteln könnte,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ich find den text soweit super - Hrhr, da kann man mal sehen was aus Spontanen Schreibdrängen entstehen kann.[/QUOTE]yep

 

[Ruttma]

Habe noch ein bischen an der Struktur rumgebastelt und Ein-Zwei Stellen ergänzt/ersetzt/hinzugefügt.

We’re falling down but no one really cares
The only things we get are disbelieving stares
We’re breaking our hopeless skulls apart
Cause there’s so much pain that pierces our heart
No one ever gives a damn about how we feel
No one has the sense to get it that it's real

Were falling down, down
Were falling deep, deep
Into oblivion so sweet
Into hells fiery heat

It crushes our human form to be alive
It splits our mind apart with a poisoned knife
A dark seed is growing steady from our deeds
Nothing left to fulfill our honest needs
A generation suddenly torn asunder
No one to blame for this deadly blunder

Were falling down, down
Were falling deep, deep
No release left to seek
Only failures which bleed

sight blurred, tumbling through this voidness world - Das könnte man natürlich auch machen, das stimmt.
A gesture of hate yet out of sight
Shame, pride, love; nothings left to hide
A mind trapped in a drowned corpse
Time runs out, still without a trace
A weak being facing a raging face

Helpless, just so endless helpless
Mind and will so strong, so strong
What exactly went wrong?
While he passes along

Helpless, just so endless helpless
Mind and will so strong, so strong
What exactly went wrong?
While he passes along